BÀI MẪU CHO ĐỀ IELTS WRITING TASK 2 NGÀY 9/ 12/ 2017

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People think that children nowadays have more freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is believed by some individuals that the young generation in modern society are given more freedom to do what they like. I partly agree with this opinion because I think whether this statement is right or not depends heavily on the children’s parents.

On the one hand, some young people today are given more permission to do what they want. This stems from the fact that the majority of parents these days are increasingly open-minded and have greater respect to their offspring’s private lives. For this reason, these people are really hands-off when it comes to their children decisions, particularly life-changing ones. By way of illustration, most children in the past were obliged to study subjects and practise skills chosen by their parents, while nowadays they are given more freedom to learn things of their interests.

On the other hand, there are also some other children who are not permitted to do what they like. A major cause for this is that many parents, at present times, are still regarded as over-caring or over-protective, which means that they tend to force themselves into almost all of their children’s decisions. Notwithstanding these parents’ assumption that they can ensure their offspring’s future prospects by doing so, the young people obviously do not have the freedom to decide on things at will.

In conclusion, I somewhat agree with the viewpoint that children in today’s world have more freedom compared with the past. From my perspective, although some young people in modern day receive more permission to decide what to do, there remain others who are not given proper rights to make decisions on their own.

273 words (approx. 30 minutes) – written by NTL – IELTS Lecturer at IELTS DISTRICT 10 (IELTS Writing 8.5)

Examiner’s feedback

Task response: 9

Cohesion and Coherence: 9

Vocabulary: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall: 8.5

Comments:

Hi,

Really well done on this essay, it is not easy to get everything right.

The only main thing that could be better is a few word choices not being ideal.